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Post by Faerie on Oct 27, 2004 6:16:09 GMT -5
I am the screams
That drown out the cries
I am the pain
That reveals the lies
I am the hate
That breeds your worst fears
I am the rage
That created your tears
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Post by Faerie on Oct 27, 2004 6:17:02 GMT -5
it's short, hope you guys don't mind.
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Post by Aaron Graf on Oct 27, 2004 18:45:19 GMT -5
Short, could be a bit lengthier.......more suspense/violence. LOL but this was actually very good though. I liked how it flowed together nicely and all, not many poems are like that. So yeah......two thumbs up otherwise. Nicely done.
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Post by Trilliana on Oct 29, 2004 16:01:03 GMT -5
yeah, I agree, could be longer, really good as it is... angsty though...
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Post by strangeclouds on Nov 1, 2004 0:11:18 GMT -5
i love it
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Post by cumslut on Feb 8, 2005 17:46:14 GMT -5
I agree that it should be longer. It could contain more violence and torture. It was good though.
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