In Another Form

[onyxfiretear]

dancing so close

(takes a cleaver and plunges you in the back)

wondering how this glorious night will end

(garbs a hand full of hair and yanks...opps)

Looking into your eyes so sweet and gentile

(gouges then out with my thumbs)

drinking from your lips, what a sweet taste of wine

(takes a straight edge blade so you can't speak)

caressing your sweet star dust neck

(wrapping a cord around it tightly...damn you are not breathing)

watching you as your lifeless body falls from my arms

(you think you can get away so easy?)

kneeling at your side I look at your face

seeing me staring back at myself

[princesskitana]

:oumm......oook? I think you need to lie down. Get some air....or a shrink...no offence i'm playing. Nice one I do have to say but is there some spelling mistakes? I dunno maybe... I dunno how it's suppose to be so whatever. It was very good none the less it would be a great way to scare someone. I do say I had written a poem long ago but it was of course different but the idea about the mirror image of yourself was similar. When I read it; it just triggered an old memory.

[Aaron Graf]

HOly shit I loved that twist. LIke this person you claim to love in it and then you're brutalizing them the best part was when it wound up being yourself. I lliked it, keep up the good work.

[strangeclouds]

i really liked that

[toolshed0673]

weird poem but amazing...i like it. ;D