Sonnet: Along The Path

[princesskitana]

One day she glides gently towards the hill,
Looking down at the people below her;
Glancing down at the statue which stood still.
Seeing the image in complete order.
Noticing the great god's image inside,
Capturing the essence from within it.
She realizes that the gift is outside.
She opens her wings and sees if they fit.
Surprisingly,she had been the true key;
which opened the door to the truth within.
Two white doves swooping towards the blue sea,
Then transforms her into a white kitten.
Her tiny body walks along the ground.
Understanding the long, rough, steep path found.

*********My Style Modern Day Sonnet*********

[unapologeticjedi]

hmmm....

you don't need the apostrophes after opens and sees.

it flows nicely.

[princesskitana]

:'(aww...oops..thanks i'll change that.

[Aaron Graf]

I liked that.......made me think of what it was you were writing...................kinda wierd but good.

[Faerie]

I liked this...quite odd, but very well written, seemed very thought out,
Great write

Gg

[Mazlo49]

after reading the first two line i wanted to go on to see what was going on but when you talked about the doves and the kitten. I made me think that the poem was a metaphor for our own life's. I think the statue symbolizes the main character and her being and angel was how she viewed herself. We she became the key she unlocked her true self with out the influence of pop culture and the absences of the ideals passed to her from her friends and family. When she became the kitten she became her true self and now has a better understanding of her life. the doves represent purity and after shes transformed she realizes that she isn't bigger then the world but instead shes only a small faction of it.