When Shall I open My Eyes?

[princesskitana]

Now shall I open my eyes?

To the sweetness of your kiss?
Or to the beating of your fists?

Now shall I open my eyes?

To the silence in your voice?
Or to the deepness of my sins?

Now shall I open my eyes?

To the distance, now bettween us?
Or to the shelter now within us?

Now shall I open my eyes?

To the oath that binded us?
Or to the dream that blinded us?

Now shall I open my eyes?

To the words you whisper to me?
Or to the carelessness you offer?

Now shall I open my eyes?

To the lies you tell me in secret?
Or to the bruises you left every evening?

Now shall I open my eyes?

To the words of "I Love You?"
Or to the signs of "I Own You?"

Now shall I open my eyes?
or
When will I open my eyes?

[Aaron Graf]

THis was very sad.....I can't exactly think of any flaws in this, the beat flowed together very smoothly. Very good poem you have written.

[skimpyvamire]

WoW....the beat, the message behind it, even the flow is just so strong...
This is wonderful....I can't think of much else to say.

[princesskitana]

Thanks a lot that really means a lot.

[strangeclouds]

'to the silence of your voice.' tired of watching you lose your voice...tired of catching- when i lost mine...nice.

[Mazlo49]

that's a really powerful poem, as you went through and talked about the different scenarios that might happen when you open your eyes. i could help but think of the people that are currently going through these feels and i think about my self as a person and my be there have been times that i haven't opened my eyes in fear of what i might see...